Entrance, by goldvermilion87

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Author: goldvermilion87
Title: Entrance
Rating: G
Theme: Pairs
Elements: in, out 
Summary: cliched Frodo angst
Word Count: 100
Author's Notes:  Late...oops...  Also, I don't think I have a good grasp of the drabble, but I figured I'd enter what I had anyway.



He stood in Sauron’s smithy. He had carried himself there on his own two feet. He drew out that … Lover? Master? Self? ... that Golden Ring. And he remembered no more.

Until he found himself standing beside his … Servant? Gardener? Brother? ... his Friend of Friends. Sam had carried him out….

But to Mordor, the land of despair. 

To be out, Frodo knew now, was not to be whole — was not to be happy.

Until…

“Come in, Mr. Frodo. You’ll catch your death of cold out here!”

And Sam led him through the green door of Bag End.

Comments

[dreamflower]

I don't find it cliched at all. It is the sort of moment of angst he would have had to be prone to after the Quest. But, as it *is* a drabble, it's over in 100 words, it serves its purpose and moves on.

I think you did quite well for a first drabble. There are three things you need for a successful one: 100 words, no more, no less; a good grasp of the subtext of canon (drabbles were created for fanfic for a reason); and a bit of a kick in the ending.

You had all three.

[goldvermilion87.livejournal.com]

Thank you! And thanks for the list of things for a proper drabble. That should help me in future. :-)